Friday, October 8, 2010

[Fiction] Friday Challenge #176 for Oct 8th, 2010

Your Main Character is a time traveller. He/She arrives at a destination but not all is as expected….
“Inside out” is my first impression. If there is an up, it’s upside down. Somewhere behind me there is a rhythm. It’s a sort of tapping sound a bit like footsteps, but I can’t be sure because my ears are inside out as well. I would be surprised, but surprise isn’t strong enough to capture what I’m feeling. Raindrops. That’s what that sound is. Really big raindrops falling on the surface of the water, and I’m under there somewhere. I can’t see anything, but I feel pink. Really pink, like when you shine a torch through your fingers and see the bones inside. My heart is beating somewhere in here with me. Beating is too strong a word though because it’s more like a squelch that makes each part of me quiver every second or so.
It isn’t all bad. I’m moving now, and I can actually feel things going past my skin. It’s nice that they don’t hurt when they bump into me, being inside out and all. I’d like to scratch that bit at the nape of my neck. I really would. No, I really need to because it’s driving me spare. Oh god, my arms! They’re gone; and my legs! I’m like an unrecognisable piece of road kill sealed in cling wrap.
Bloody Museum. They told me the HG Wells Time machine wasn’t just a replica. Since when has their information actually been correct? When I read the book, I’m sure he push the lever downwards to go forward in time. Didn’t he?
I think I went backwards. A long way backwards. Its going to be a wait. A long wait for evolution to put me back on track.  A long way back to vertebrate for this little amoeba.
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10 comments:

  1. I love the line 'I’m like an unrecognisable piece of road kill sealed in cling wrap.' Gross but kinna cool!

    Great take on the prompt. I read it back once I got to the end, and it all fell into place. Brilliant.

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  2. Time travel gone horribly wrong. Nice take on the prompt. At first I thought your MC had gone back to the womb, but at second reading it looks like he's gone way further than that.

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  3. That was good. Oops...pushed back the lever too far. I'm trying to come up with something, but brain is not working so far due to a cold...

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  4. i love the ending. I was thinking at the beginning that time travel must feel like being turned inside out but then BAM! Great writing. Really enjoyed it!

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  5. This is the type of time travel I like to see, like where the person can't travel back past a certain point because they didn't exist before that point.

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  6. Wonderful description, and a nice twist for the ending. I liked it very much.

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  7. Ywp I also thought at first you were describing the process of going back in time, and then maybe you were in the womb... the end took me by surprise, nice twist!

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  8. "Raindrops. That’s what that sound is. Really big raindrops falling on the surface of the water, and I’m under there somewhere." - love this imagery. :)

    "I can’t see anything, but I feel pink. Really pink, like when you shine a torch through your fingers and see the bones inside." - Don't know about this sentence though - it's interesting, and it really caught my attention but feeling "pink" seems a bit off, somehow.

    I pictured a womb as well...
    Haha. Enjoyed the comical voice.

    Thanks for the great read! :)

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  9. This was wonderfully visceral in the descriptions. The voice was tempered with a little bit of panic, a little bit of interest and a little bit of 'what the heck.' Whole lot of fun
    Adam B @revhappiness

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